PROBLEM IDENTIFIED

- Short form
- Not stating the purpose clearly
- Inappropriate language
- Unnecessary points included
- Point are not in order

STEP

- Change from short form to actual word
- Properly introduce oneself
- Rearrange points and contents
- Get rid of unimportant points
- State the points clearly
- Use appropriate language

REFLECTION

Subject : Extra Tutor Class
Hi Mr. Jack, I am a student of local university from Finland. I am currently not doing good in my university's subject so I am wondering if you do courses for university students too, because I am in the need of extra tutor class to help me with my studies. If there is, do you mind sending me the timetable of the tutor class to me because that will be really helpful, and is there any extra activities after school because it would be quite interesting if there are and I would like to take part in it. I am hoping that you could give feedback to me regarding the info that requested. Thank you

Joanna

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